Cheremshina

[Ivan_Mazepa]

Well, any comments on the translation?

[Unbreakable]

Brilliant! Fantastic! Unbelievable!
You▓re poetry genius! Talent Ukraine should be proud of!
Shevchenko Prize awaits for You! And Nobel too! You should be next Ukrainian minister of culture!
(is it enough? √ if You wanted to be praised┘ )
But if You want a bit of criticism √ You▓ve made interlinear translation √ if it was poetic/rhymed √ song could be sung in English (and maybe You▓d be able to sell it to George Michael or Michael Jackson √ and become rich and famous!).
Good idea! √ maybe I▓ll try too! √ do You have link to original (Ukrainian) lyrics?

[benda]

You've certainly got a talent. Quite a good translation. Now try to sing it, please.

[Ivan_Mazepa]

http://poetry.uazone.net/song38.html

Brilliant! Fantastic! Unbelievable!
You▓re poetry genius! Talent Ukraine should be proud of!
Shevchenko Prize awaits for You! And Nobel too! You should be next Ukrainian minister of culture!

Let me read yours.
And see if what the people say -Those who can't do, criticize - true.

[Ivan_Mazepa]

Originally Posted by benda

You've certainly got a talent. Quite a good translation. Now try to sing it, please.

Sorry for "editing" your post, I didn't change anything.
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I'd need to think of rhymes and rhytm- too much, I'm no poet.

Unbreakable can rhyme

[benda]

No doubt he can.

[Ivan_Mazepa]

Pane Unbreakable, where's the translation?